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Hello, everyone! Hope this finds you well. I’m starting to think about the events and stuff that will accompany the release of House of Bone and Rain in August, which means I’m also thinking about the amount of editing that went into it. Editing is a crucial part of writing. I know a lot of people hate it, but editing is a chance (or, in most cases, a bunch of chances) to make your work better. I love it because of that. Working with a great editor can be as invaluable as working with the right agent, but before you get that manuscript into someone else’s hands, you should do everything in your power to make it as good as possible. Unfortunately, editing your own work is tricky because you have things almost memorized and you know where the story is going, so you often fail to see plot holes or spot details that need work. Also, there are things we all do that, because we’ve done them for a while, we don’t see. In my case, for example, people are always looking at stuff, looking at each other, looking at their hands or shoes or out the window…you get the point. When I’m editing someone else’s novel, I identify those things immediately. When I’m working on my on stuff, it’s a different story. To help with that, I’m giving you ten tricks that will come in handy when editing your own work. Some might work better than others for you and some you might already be doing, but I suggest trying them all.
Read your work out loud
This is a classic trick that I’ve found works wonders. Dialogue never sounds the same in your head as it does in the real world. Characters should have different voices, and that means their rhythm and phrasing should be unique within your narrative. Also, reading stuff out loud throws awkward phrasing at your face and whispers “That’s pretty awful/unnecessarily convoluted/too damn long” in your ear. If you find yourself having to catch your breath while reading your dialogue…well, you get the point. Also, watching readers stumble over their own words and frown always tells me the same thing: they are reading them out loud for the first time. Don’t be that reader.
Identify the things you always do wrong
You’re not perfect. I’m not perfect. No one’s perfect. Just like musicians develop bad practices, writers often do things they shouldn’t because they come naturally to them. Being honest about these things can mean the difference between turning in a superb manuscript that’s pretty close to its final form and turning in something that needs an inordinate amount of work. For example, I know that three things will probably sneak into everything I write: the words “just” and sometimes “very,” obsessive descriptions of movement, and people looking at things and each other (seriously, people look at stuff and at each other a LOT in my first drafts). I know these things are wrong, so I tend to either keep them in mind as I edit, or do one editing pass looking for them (I almost wrote “just looking for those things.” Hah).
Channel all your insecurities and turn them into an editing tool
If you go in thinking something is the best thing you’ve ever written, you will probably fail to fix whatever is wrong with it. Instead of doing that, gather all your insecurities, sharpen them, and then use them to analyze your work. If you think something sucks, rewrite it so it’s better. If you think a line could be shorter, cut it. If you think a scene could use more detail, add it because you’re probably right. You should learn to walk the fine line between “This sucks!” and “There are a few things here that certainly suck, but I have what it takes to fix them.”
Put yourself in the shoes of your ideal reader
If you write, you’re also a reader (or at least you should be). Work on teaching yourself how to approach your work as a reader instead of a writer. This means you should focus on the big picture. It’s incredibly easy to get caught up on every sentence, but we need to remember that readers often fly through a narrative, especially if they’re engaged and want to know what happens next. It usually takes me a year and a half or two years to get a novel done…and then people email and DM me that they read it in one day. That means the line you spend two days on will be devoured in seconds. Ask yourself if what you’re reading is exciting, entertaining, engaging, etc. If it’s not, fix it.
Learn to switch hats
This is easy for some of us because we do different things (writing, teaching, editing, reviewing, etc). However, it is a skill everyone should develop. When you’re done writing, take off your writing hat and put on your editing hat. You’re no longer trying to create anything, to pull a story out of your soul; you’re working on polishing something, and that means one of your main focuses will be finding weaknesses in the writing and fixing them. Once you have the ability to switch hats and become an editor…
Be merciless
This is about getting the story in the best shape possible. Fuck your feelings. Edit mercilessly. Edit ruthlessly. Take a knife and slaughter as many of your babies as you need to in order to make the narrative as lean, fast, powerful, and engaging as you can. You can cry later. Plus, if you really care about your readers—and about getting published—maybe accepting that that bloated 180,000-word novel could move much better at 110,000 words is the best thing you can do for yourself and for your book.
Have a clear understanding of your style and ignore rules that don’t apply to you
Here are some things you will hear:
“Cut long sentences in two.” Well, sometimes a long sentence does the trick. Sometimes a long sentence is a beautiful thing. Thirty long sentences in a row might be too much and will destroy your rhythm, but one or two from time to time might work. Remember: do whatever works for you.
“Always stick to one voice.” This one is solid. You know, except when it’s not. Sometimes one voice isn’t enough. Don’t be afraid to use as many voices as you need to tell your story the best way you can.
“Get rid of all redundancies.” Okay, hear me out on this one. First, sometimes you need redundancies in dialogue because people are often redundant. I hate it when everyone sounds like an MIT professor. Second, sometimes a redundancy will drive the point home and improve your rhythm. Are redundancies good? No, but never say never, you know?
The list goes on and on. Some of them make all the sense in the world, but others try too hard to set rules in place that don’t take into account how unique some narratives can be. Take what you know you can use and throw away the rest.
Grammar matters
This one makes people angry. I’m not talking about an occasional typo here; I’m talking about reading published books where the author doesn’t know that then and than aren’t interchangeable, or that to and too or off and of aren’t the same thing…and their editors either missed that or also ignored the difference. Writers should know what words mean. If you think disinterested and uninterested are the same thing, or that advice and advise are the same word, or affect and effect are interchangeable, you need to stop typing for a minute and go learn what those words mean so you can use them correctly. Oh, and if you want to fight about this one, just know that I say it with love and that I’m a guy who reads and reviews a lot of books…or the dude who might end up being your editor depending on who publishes your book.
Respect punctuation
Unless your name is Donald Trump, you shouldn’t abuse exclamation points! When you do, they lose their impact! Eventually, they start looking dumb! See, what I mean!? Exactly!!!
Remember the things you know
When you’re writing, you’re slicing your soul open and pouring it onto the page. When you’re done, you have to pull back and look at what you created. Writing is about getting the story out. Editing is about making that story better. This means you need to remind yourself of the importance of elements like pacing, worldbuilding, character development, and economy of language. Keep those things in mind and use them as filters. Look at what you did right and the things you could’ve done better, and then do them better.
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Want to read House of Bone and Rain early? Mulholland is giving away 25 copies on Goodreads! Here’s the link:
https://www.goodreads.com/giveaway/show/382979-house-of-bone-and-rain
Thanks for reading. More soon…
G
Great article. I wondered if you would be interested in doing a version of this idea for WriterCon Magazine. If that interests you, email me: willbern@gmail.com. Thanks! Bill Bernhardt
Hey Man! This couldn’t arrive on a best time. I’ve been struggling for some while in the revision stage of some of my short stories and this really gives me some good suggestions to try.
Would be awesome to have more insides of the reviewing process later on, or more writing wisdom.
Muchas gracias!